words that work
Just the other day, I came across a flyer at my gym: ’10 Reasons to have a Personal Trainer’.
Mentally, I started rewriting it.
1. A Personal Trainer will get you to your exercise destination with minimal steps, there is no quicker way to achieve your goals. [Their punctuation, not mine.]
Get there faster.
2. A Good Personal Trainer will progress you at the correct pace for you as an individual, therefore preventing under and overtraining.
Work at your own pace.
3. A Personal Trainer can adjust each exercise each time you come in, depending on your individual circumstance for that session.
Get the most out of every session.
4. A Personal Trainer’s knowledge means that you will never struggle to find an exercise, a Personal Trainer will always have an alternative to an exercise that you struggle to do.
Make it easy.
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I’m sure you can see a pattern here. Pulling out the benefit appeals directly to the reader, and grabs their attention.
And that’s important – this notice was on the inside of a locker door, so it got only a fleeting glance. I’d elaborate each snappy heading with some detail, but not too much. The copy was far too long, considering where it was.
By the time I made it to number 10, I felt as if I’d already worked out. For a moment, I even thought about using a personal trainer. But just for a moment…